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ordinary people try to copy famous people either magazine or watching tv.why do they do this?do you think its a good idea to copy famous people?

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 many of them tend to wear and act like their group or
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 actor or player to gain
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attention
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 to look into it. Another factor is the community assessment for
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how to treat you.Meanwhile, the old fashion of assessment
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community
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 fact that not all
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. In conclusion, people try to cope
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