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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Public transportation is one initial necessity that countries should have. In a number of countries, some people speculate that it is necessary to allocate a huge amount of
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 constructing modern railway systems to make
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trains faster between cities.
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, others assume that allocate the
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 to spend on improving current public
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. I would like to discuss both those sides and explain more with personal reasons.
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 constructing public transportation in some nations is demanding. It is because public transportation
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 as fast trains are easily accessible for everyone who wants to commute from one area to another area without hassle.
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 as word of mouth which inevitably increases the revenue
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, others believe that the
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 upgrading existing public
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 of constructing the new one.
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some middle-economy
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 they would not get ready yet to make public
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 a priority on their list.
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, if they were made loans, they have to pay their
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 their interest.
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, the developing country might make other priorities that they have to tackle first
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 as improving either the educational system or healthy public facilities. All in all, some nations have their priority
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 building public
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 has pros and cons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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