The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees.
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The given map illustrates the present layout of the industrial area and how it will have changed in the future after being developed. Over the period, both maps have maintained natural resources despite the extensive construction of commercial and medical facilities. A closer look at the current map shows that on its eastern
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, there are eight factories. After the redevelopment, these factories are replaced with new housing for employees. Some medical and commercial facilities will have been added to the southside after the
plan
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. Regarding the changes in the middle of the
plan
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, the very first thing we see is that two roads will have been built around the square.
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, a school and a playground will be added to the western
side
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. At the top of the
plan
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in the middle of the river, new housing will be constructed on the northern
side
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of the
plan
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and
also
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new square will be added to the south
side
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.
To sum up
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, in
this
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development
plan
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, new housing and facilities and loads will be replaced by factories.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words side, plan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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