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Today's children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#children #pressure #society
There is no doubt that
children
 are under observation for better planning in the nascent world overview.
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 modernism may show some of these traits
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this
 is not a new phenomenon as it is only reasonable up to a point.
To begin
 with, it is important to acknowledge that
children
 are the reflection of a more intense lifestyle in the present situation.
this
 is
due to
 the fact that competition is the new norm in any case of everyday
life
.
For example
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 they have developed a mindset to follow rules like behaving gently
then
 force to attend a preschool which eventually creates more pressure and various psychological disorders. if parents willingly focus on the fitness of their
children
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society they could have garnered more positivity in future than the
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 and situation encouraging the guardian to take necessary steps as fast as possible leaving with a more structured and planned
life
 for their
children
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As a result
, those who envisioned
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their passion that would have
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come after pursuing their education will disappear.
Nevertheless
, there are often limits
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 how much we are discovering when it comes to measuring the pressure of
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 adolescent.
This
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 the verge of technology and flexibility that makes it even possible to outperform in any activities without leaving our comfort zone. It is often said that science made
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new room for performing a task from homework to
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 in the workplace in a minimal time period with an excessive amount of information
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online, any mentor can encourage them to use
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 practical
life
 to make additional time for family and to exercise brain power in extra sports activities.
In contrast
, it is more than possible that
such
 work could be overloaded if there was not any invention it will more likely produce the feeling of dissatisfaction,the catalyst of unavoidable diseases and curtail happiness more importantly concomitant to the less affluent in the journey of
life
.
To conclude
,it is not too hard to fathom that
children
 are under various pressure from a modern-day perspective
although
,In my opinion, there is a danger of being misled if we rely on
this
 method of assessment all the time .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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