The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
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The table presents the percentage of
students
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getting admitted
in
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to

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four categories of secondary
schools
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in three different years (2000, 2005 and 2009). As per the data, Voluntary-controlled
schools
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outnumbered others in
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the commulative

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commulative
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cumulative
commutative

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percentage of all years,
While
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specialists were least attended. Community
Schools
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gained popularity over the years as
it
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they

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continued to increase. On the alternative end,
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Students
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the Students

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going to Voluntary-controlled
oragnization
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organisations

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kept decreasing. In the year 2000, Voluntary-controlled got more than half
pupils
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of pupils

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engaged compared to the others with
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage

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of 52%. Specialists and Community had
same
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the same

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amount of learners of 12%. Grammer
school
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schools

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were involved with almost
quarter
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a quarter

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of
students
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with
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apply

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24%. By the year 2000 onwards, voluntary
schools
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kept on sharply decreasing in 2005 and 2009 with
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the proportion
a proportion
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the proportion
a proportion

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proportion
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proportions
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of 38% and 20% respectively.
In contrast
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,
number
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a number
the number

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of
students
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attending community
schools
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were
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was

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sharply rising
with
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to

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32% in 2005 and 52% in 2009.
However
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, Specialist
schools
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remained steady over the period of time and
grammer
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grammar

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schools
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fell from 19% to 12% in 2009.

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