The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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figures
in terms of CO2
emmisions
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emissions
per person in four European countries (the UK,
Sweden
,Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007.
Figures
are measured in metric
tonnes
.
Overall
, Portugal and Italy
were
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increased their emissions of carbon dioxide over the time period,
while
the United Kingdom and
Sweden
were
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to reduce their CO2
emmissions
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emissions
.
Although
,
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the
figures
of
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Sweden
and Portugal had
significant
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difference
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in 1967, it has reached
to
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the same level in the year 2007.
Besides
, the most CO2 emission was from the UK
according to
the graph. Portugal and Italy started at around 1 and 4 metric
tonnes
of carbon dioxide respectively in the year
of
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1967 and rose in the following decades. Portugal witnessed
a
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steady growth until 1987 and reached approximately 3.5 metric
tonnes
before
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to 4.5 metric
tonnes
in 1997,
while
Italy experienced a small fluctuation
during
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1967 to 19997 and accounted for roughly 9.5
metic
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tonnes
of CO2.
However
, in the
last
decade(1997-2007) both Italy and Portugal remained at the same
figures
of approximately 9.5 and 4.5 metric
tonnes
respectively.
On the other hand
, the UK showed the highest of 11
MT
in 1967 and declined during the period and reached the lowest of 9MT in 207.
Finally
,
Sweden
began at 9MT of CO2 in 1967 and climbed significantly in 1997 to reach the peak of 11MT and dropped to 5MT in 2007, which was the same amount of CO2 that Portugal released in 2007.
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