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The table's below show people reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intended to give up.

The table's below show people reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intended to give up.
#show #people
This
table
 illustrates the information regarding the individual reasons for giving up
smoking
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the smoking
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habit
Fix the agreement mistake
habits
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,
while
Correct word choice
and
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 when they intended to give up.
Overall
,it
clear
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is clear
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 that
begain
Correct your spelling
began
 the
table
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table's
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highly
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high
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number
 of smokers
in
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is
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 better for health in
general
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the general
a general
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 category.
However
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,However
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 in
second
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the second
a second
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table
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,table
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 there
are
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is
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 lesser
number
 of people who
quite
Correct your spelling
quit
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 smoking in the next six months. It is evident from the
table
 that
number
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a number
the number
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 of cigarettes smoked per day was 71% and they waiting
for
Change preposition
to
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 give up because of better health.
While
total
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a total
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31
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of 31
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% of cigarettes smoked per day
was
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were
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 waiting
for
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to
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 financial pressure.
On the other hand
 total
number
 of 71% of cigarette
smoker
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smokers
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 intended to give up within
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 6 months.
Initially
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,Initially
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 29% of cigarettes smoked do not intend to give up.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words table, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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