The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this

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drastic changes in human behaviour because of the modern era. To some
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agree with the statement.
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for preparing
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generation
should not work.
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delineates the reasoning for my opinion. To embark on,
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changed a lot. Nowadays Youth were getting all facility
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. They are living in
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high tech
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world
.
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Children
will get easily
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if we
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to follow old ideas. Everything changed
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the decades. Schools,
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with
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time. So obviously our living style, thoughts and
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behaviour
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generation
lived without
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that time there is no cellphone. In the Contemporary
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even toddlers are getting phones in
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hands. If we ask
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teengers
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teenagers
not to use
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phone
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, they will fight or they will do something like suicide. There are
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different
methods to
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up
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generation
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that
,
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younger
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children
are very intelligent than
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the older
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generation
.
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when we were
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we don't know
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what is bad touch and good touch.But in the Current
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a class
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class
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classes
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for
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programmes. Schools are playing
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important role in
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the younger
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generation
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character
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building
. Nowadays Young people are expecting
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friendly approach from older people.In past we were
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afraid
of Older people They use to scold
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if it is
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a small
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fault. But
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the approach
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of a senior
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persons
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also
changed they come to know that, Scolding will
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to more
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.Young children don't like to scold them. If they are doing
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something
wrong,
Instead
of scolding we need to talk and they should realise
there
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fault. In conclusion,
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changing so fast. So our thoughts, lifestyle,
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needed to be Updated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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