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Artifically intelligent robots are increasingly taking humans jobs. Some people belive that eventually all the work will be done by robots while others belive that there will be a limit to the tasks that robots can perform. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you choose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences observations or reading. Write between 200 and 300 words.

In today’s world, the number of artificially intelligent
robots
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 is growing, and many human jobs are being replaced by machines. Some
people
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 believe that in the future all work will be done by
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 others argue that
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robots
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 have already taken over many tasks, there will still be certain limits to what they can do.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before giving my personal opinion. On the one hand, technology plays a vital role in
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’s
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. They
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 it in almost every aspect of their daily routines,
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 as in education, at the workplace, and even for household tasks.
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, there are many advanced applications that help students study more effectively,
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 as ChatGPT.
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, at home,
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use
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 smart devices like robotic vacuum cleaners and voice assistants
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 as Alexa to do household chores, which makes their daily
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 more comfortable and efficient.
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, some
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 believe that artificially intelligent
robots
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 are taking over human jobs, which leads to less communication and emotional connection among
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, as they become increasingly dependent on technology.
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, many
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 prefer chatting with AI assistants
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 of talking
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face-to-face
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. When they need advice about something, they often
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 programs rather than discussing their problems with friends or family.
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, communication and emotional connection among
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 tend to decrease. In conclusion,
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 AI
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 make
people
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’s
lives
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 easier and more convenient, humans should
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 them responsibly and in a balanced way to avoid losing real social relationships. Technology should support human life, not replace it, and
people
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 need to maintain real communication and emotional connection in order to live more meaningful
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.

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Task response
State your main view clearly in the opening, and keep your point in mind in every paragraph.
Coherence
Use simple linking to show how ideas fit, for example first, also, however, and finally.
Ideas
Give more real cases or facts to back up your idea.
Word count
Try to stay within 200-300 words.
Structure
Clear structure with an intro, body and conclusion
Balance
Discuss both sides before giving a view
Examples
Uses examples such as ChatGPT and smart home devices
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