Some people believe that children’s leisure activity must be educational other wise they are complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays it is
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thought that
infant's
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free time might be used only to teach something new.
However
, I believe it is important for kids to have a moment during the day in which they can do whatever they want, albeit, not every activity
that is
not
striclty
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strictly
educational can make the boy learn something. Little ones,
for example
, are able to learn from sports
importans
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important
values
such
as respect and collaboration.
First,
in
sport
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by following rigid rules and facing opponents kids learn to follow directions and
to
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respect others despite
of
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differencies
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differences
between themselves.
Moreover
, it is crucial for children to accept loss,
furthermore
understand that not everything goes always as planned and the world can be cruel.
Secondly
, sometimes in a team
throughout
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teamwork
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you are able to reach results that would not have been reachable on your own.
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, I find
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more satisfying
achieving
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something with my friends than on my own,
such
as taking a good grade in
a
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group work. In conclusion, I think that you can learn lots of things not only from books or educational activities but
also
from other people and life experiences,
such
as going on a trip abroad or
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part in a team sport.
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