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it is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#parents #course #children
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In the present
generation
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 there is a need for
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a parent
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parent
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parents
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 to attend parenting sessions to properly raise their
children
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. In
this
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essay
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 we shall discuss various reasons why there is
need
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 to train parents
how
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 to bring their
children
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 up. To embark upon most
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parent
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parents
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now a days
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 are not aware
how
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 to properly raise their
children
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especially
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first time
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 parents,
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example
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 mostly they tend to quarrel in front of
children
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 which will result in
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negative
 thinking for
children
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 about their
parents
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parent's
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 relationship. One more reason is that
now a days
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 mostly both mother and father are working which leads to less time being spent with their
children
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, which
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 results in
children
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 developing bad habits at
early
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 stage. In
parent
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 training
session
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sessions
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 trained
councellors
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counsellors
councillors
 will develop
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the skill
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skill
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skills
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 to
parent
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 like how to take better care of their
children
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, in
additon
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addition
 to
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 they will
also
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 guide how to help
children
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 with their
home work
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homework
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, how to develop bonding with
children
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 etc.
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 course will
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 help them how to guide their
children
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 to identify which skills or
talent
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 they are good at and
also
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 how to survive in
this
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 competitive world. In
conclusion
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 we have seen various reasons that
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parent
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parents
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 need to attend
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parent
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a parent
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 training
course
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courses
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 to bring up their
children
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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