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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are causes? And what will be effected on society?

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With the increasing demand for ,technology society is diverting from
science
. It has been seen that in various parts of the
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world
 learners are drifting apart from courses like
science
 as it seems too complex and needs patience. In
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passage I will explain how learners do not want to do their schooling in
science
.
To begin
 ,
science
 involves experiments and maths and is a lengthy process which can take years to study or complete the course.
For instance
, to understand a procedure or chemical you have to learn a combination of chemicals and choosing the right procedure is the most important part which is time-consuming. society tends to lose hope and patience
while
 performing
such
 tasks and tends to switch
career
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 from
science
 to more fun subjects. Another problem that needs to be considered, some people find
science
 to be a boring subject as a lot of practical experiments need to be done and the same pattern of learning makes it boring to study.
On the other hand
, art and commerce have a variety of options to choose from like art,music and math which lets you meet new people and have fancy careers linked to them which makes these courses more appealing to an individual.
For example
, learners learning art will get a chance to explore the
world
 and may end up getting their dream job.
To sum up
, students have valid reasons to skip
science
 as a subject and opt for an easy subject which consumes less effort and time.
However
, these parameters have some negative impacts towards our
world
 as with the decreasing number of scientists there would be less number of experiments performed which can help the
world
 grow. One immediate practical solution is to make students aware of the importance of
science
 and the government should try to shorter the courses.
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