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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.
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The bar chart compares the total proportion of the world
population
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 in India ,
China
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 , the USA and Japan which were measured in percentage over a 52-year time period from 1950 to 2000 , and it
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 predicts the
population
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rate
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 of 2050 too . In general , the
population
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rate
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 of
China
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 had decreased considerably after 52 years , and it had predicted that ; will continue to fall in future and the same trend can be seen for Japan too .
Whereas
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 , India had risen
population
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 throughout the year and it would increase in 2050 . To be specific ,
China
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 had the highest
population
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 in 1950 compared to the other three countries , which was around 24% .
However
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 , after 52 years , the
population
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rate
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 of
China
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 had noticed a moderate decrease , accounted 20% , and it had forecasted that it will continue to fall in 2050 and reach a minority , and it was similar for Japan , which dropped 4% to 3% in 2002 and it will again decline to a very small number in 2050 . Meanwhile , India had a 15% of
population
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rate
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 in 1950 , and in 2002
this
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 amount of
population
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 had risen to approximately 17% and it had projected that it will again have a 4% increase in 2050 .
By contrast
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 , the USA was the third most populated nation out of 4 nations and it accounted for about 4% in the initial year in 2002 it climbed slightly to 5% and it has been anticipated it will be stable in 2050

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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