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Some people think hard work and determination bring sucess. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For being a successful person, there are many definitions you may hear of. Smart
people
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 think that hard
work
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 and
determination
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 are important,
while
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 others say wealth and good looking bring
success
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.
This
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 essay will discuss how
one
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 can succeed by being a persistent worker and goal-oriented, and the same with
money
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 and a better appearance. On the
one
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 hand, most successful
people
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 advised the world how constant
work
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 or striving towards a goal and a focused mind helped them to achieve their objectives. They add that trying again and again and learning from past mistakes help anyone to achieve
success
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. Each time you fail, you learn something, which means you achieve something that leads you towards your
success
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. Former President of America, Abraham Lincon, is an example of
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 phenomenon. He failed many times, but always come back and stood up with more confidence and
determination
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.
Therefore
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, I believe that everything is possible to achieve for you if persistent
work
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 and
determination
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 are your main traits.
However
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, Some short-sighted
people
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 say that wealth and handsomeness are more important to become successful. They add that
money
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 helps them to buy expensive resources that
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 aid them to achieve a goal. Plus, a good appearance helps anyone to enter into the business and sales industry.
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, it is seen that sales persons, and celebrities
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 as sportsmen, actors, tycoons etc., are good-looking and attract other
people
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 to watch them.
One
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 can become a brand ambassador because of good looking only. But, I opine that
money
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 cannot buy
one
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's
success
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, and an attractive look may help you to enter the businesses wherein your good appearance is important. In conclusion,
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money
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 and a charming look can help you to buy resources and become a famous personality, I think that hard
work
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 and
determination
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 are more important factors to be considered to accomplish objectives.
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