The two maps show a park in 2010 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps show a park in 2010 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided two maps reveal that the public place called Grange was renovated between 1920 and the present day. Looking for an
overall
perspective, from 1920 to the present the garden was totally changed and added more entertainment features,
water
features, and relaxation features
while
eliminating and renovating some characteristics.
To begin
with, the stage for musicians, in the west of the
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garden has been converted and modernized into an Amphitheatre for concerts and the seating facilities which were positioned around the stage for musicians have been removed. And
also
the pond for
water
plants in the northeast of the place has been flattened and a play area for children has been constructed
while
the rose backyard to the west of the pond was removed and a cafe has been placed.
Moreover
, the fountain in the middle of the park was knocked-down and a big Rose field has been relocated
whereas
seating facilities have been positioned around the Rose garden. The glass house was demolished and a
water
feature has been added to the east of the south entrance. The two entrances and some Rose gardens still remained and a new underground car park entrance has been relocated to the east of the
water
feature.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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