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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree

It is argued that modern communication technology
iss
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is
 having some
disadvantage
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 influences on relationships, especially social
relationship
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relationships
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. In my opinion,
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 am in
argument
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 with
this
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 view. Here
is
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 some points about
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantageous
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 effects of modern communication.
Firstly
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,
people
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 who want to make
friends
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in
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on
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 the
internet
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 can easily sign in
any
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to any
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 online
pgaes
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page
such
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 as Facebook,
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Online
friends
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 are very toxic.they are not like in some
picture
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 which they update
in
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on
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 the
internet
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.they give you some harmful websites and take your money away, or some
people
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 accused you of something they did,etc.
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, a person who
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addict
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internet
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don’t
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doesn’t
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 want to talk with real
people
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,
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and don’t
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don’t
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want
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 communicate
wuth
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with
friends
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 or family,
relatives
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or relatives
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,... They are just
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 in
people
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in
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on
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 the
internet
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.
Although
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people
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 are real or not real in
social
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society
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, they want to talk with them. In conclusion, modern communication technology
have
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 a lot of benefits like
connect
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connecting
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 everyone from everywhere
in
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earth
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,.. but some
people
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are not use
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are not using
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 if
right
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the right
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 purpose. I believe that
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internet
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the internet
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 will become the most important device to make
friends
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 if we know how to use it for
the
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apply
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good purpose,
not
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and not
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 depend on it too much.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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