Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree

It is argued that modern communication technology
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is
having some
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influences on relationships, especially social
relationship
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. In my opinion,
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am in
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with
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some points about
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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effects of modern communication.
Firstly
,
people
who want to make
friends
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the
internet
can easily sign in
any
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online
pgaes
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page
such
as Facebook,
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Online
friends
are very toxic.they are not like in some
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which they update
in
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the
internet
.they give you some harmful websites and take your money away, or some
people
accused you of something they did,etc.
Secondly
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addict
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internet
don’t
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want to talk with real
people
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and don’t
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don’t
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want
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communicate
wuth
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with
friends
or family,
relatives
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or relatives
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,... They are just
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in
people
in
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on
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the
internet
.
Although
people
are real or not real in
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, they want to talk with them. In conclusion, modern communication technology
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a lot of benefits like
connect
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everyone from everywhere
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earth
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,.. but some
people
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if
right
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the right
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purpose. I believe that
internet
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will become the most important device to make
friends
if we know how to use it for
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good purpose,
not
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depend on it too much.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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