Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.

With the advent of technology, we can see that there is a giant leap in the development of

computer

games

.

Computer

games

are advertised today in

such

a way that even adults would buy them.

Therefore

, it is very critical to consider, whether these

games

are a

waste

of

time

or not for

children

. From my perspective, I agree with the statement that

computer

games

is

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in fact a

waste

of

time

among

children

mainly for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.

Firstly

, the rapid development of

computer

games

have

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been notable in the

economny

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economy

.

Children

playing these

games

will make them more

addictive

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to these

games

and

also

curse one another. Most of these

games

come with an inbuilt voice chat which

allow

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players to talk with each other.

For example

, a friend of mine joined college the same year as me. From the

begining

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beginning

of

college

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he was involved in

computer

games

, which made him fall back on his course

a

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couple of years.

In addition

to the game being addictive, he

also

started cursing out loud whenever he lost a game.

Children

at a very young age should

spent

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time

reading books and gaining knowledge,

instead

of flushing down their lives playing these

computer

games

.

Secondly

, the amount of hours spent playing these

games

is long that

children

loose

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track of

time

. Recently,

few

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a few

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facebook

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users have started sharing live videos of them gaming online for almost 6 straight hours.

Such

immersive attention to these

games

for long hours can cause detrimental effects

to

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vision as well

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to

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the body.

This

in turn

cause

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obesity which brings along other types of health diseases.

Thirdly

, there are

this

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online

games

which

promises

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you that you will get money if you become a premium member. Not only

this

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a big

waste

of

time

,

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but

also

very dangerous as game developers can access

the

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credit card

informations

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information

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for their

benfits

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benefits

. In conclusion, reflecting on the issue

whether

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of whether

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children

should be allowed to these

games

or not, I

beleive

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believe

that it

a

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toatal

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total

waste

of

time

.