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Many criminals re-offend after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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In recent times, the criminal re-offend rate is very alarming and specialists are trying to find out a considerable solution to
this
 problem.
This
 essay will explore the causes of criminal re-offend
as well as
 the plausible solution to it. Correction of
criminals
 is one of the challenging tasks of the modern age as the ever-increasing
crime
 rate disturbs the harmony of society.
Although
 there are plenty of correctional homes, a significant number of
criminals
 are involved in crimes after releasing from jail. The primary reason is most correctional homes focus on punishing offenders rather than correcting their mistakes. They sentence
criminals
 for a certain period of time
however
, ignore what aspects of their characteristics are responsible for their crimes.
Therefore
,
criminals
 still bear the same mentality of
crime
 when they even release from jail. The secondary reason is there are not enough employment opportunities for
criminals
.
As a result
, a number of
criminals
while
 set free from jail again engage in
crime
 for their survival. There are several measures that can be taken to manage criminal re-offend. First of all, prison should be aimed at not only punishing
criminals
 but
also
 trying to bring them into normal life.
For example
, giving them proper counselling to change their behaviour and thoughts or engaging them in creative or humanitarian tasks inside the prison with proper supervision and guidelines. These would help them to change their criminal mindsets.
Secondly
, creating opportunities for employment for
criminals
, so they do not involve in
further
crime
 after release. Most importantly, society should accept
criminals
 as human beings and should hate crimes
instead
 of
criminals
.
Otherwise
, when the criminal realizes that society does not accept him, out of aggression there are chances of
further
 criminal involvement.
To conclude
,
criminals
 should be treated as human beings and to stop the
crime
 rate people and the authority should change their mindset towards
criminals
.
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