this graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls ar Starmoth School from 2006 to the present.

this graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls ar Starmoth School from 2006 to the present.
This
chart appearance about graduates of different sex who study books in their library. from 2006 to the present. In
this
,
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essay I will analyze
this
graph carefully and
also
give an appropriate analogy. As can be observed
this
is a fluctuating graph.
Firstly
,
this
chart began in 2009. as can estimate the number of
girls
who read books was only 22
people
.
While
the
boys
were more active. 44
people
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boys
had reddened the book from the library. In 2010 both groups had a slight increase in the past. The number of
boys
got to 80
people
. And
also
the
girls
had 40
people
in the chart.
This
trend continued until 2011. in that year
this
school had spectacular changes in
girls
. because both of them were the same. And were 100
people
. The girl's group had a sharp rise in that year. In 2012 the number of
boys
had a gradual decrease. They went to 80
people
on the graph. But
on the other hand
,
girls
went up to 140
people
in that year.
Girls
had a dramatic rise between 2011 and 2012.
Overall
, both groups had ascending trend until 2011. but in
last
, the
girls
' group overcome the
boys
finally
.
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