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In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to same-sex schools or co-ordinated schools.Some believe that the children going to single-sex schools might have dissadvantages later on.To what extent do you believe?

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Nowadays, parents have many options of
schools
 to choose from when deciding to send their
children
 to
schools
, whether it is a single-sex school or a co-educational.
However
, many believe that there are disadvantages to choosing same-sex
schools
. Despite many different opinions, I think that
children
 in single-
gender
schools
 can have better learning and emotional experiences and
therefore
 they are better.
To begin
 with,
children
 in single-sex
schools
 are able to concentrate on their studies better because they're not destructed by socializing with the opposite
gender
. They spend more time thinking about the curriculum subjects rather than wasting time on impressing male students.
Children
 can benefit from student-teacher interactions in
same
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gender
school
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.
Children
 find it easier to express themselves in front of the same
gender
 students and teachers.
For instance
, it is easier to talk about our emotions,
problems
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 associated with our own
gender
 in front of
the
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same sex
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 audience.
Although
 there are many advantages to choosing
the
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single-sex
schools
 there are several drawbacks too.
Children
 have less interaction
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the opposite members of
the
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society,
firstly
, they can miss out
onflearning
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on learning
of learning
 from one another and
secondly
 limited communication with the opposite
gender
 might create a barrier and communication difficulties later on in their lives.
For example
, they might not know how to handle relationships. Males might not know how females operate and vice versa.
To conclude
, parents now have a choice of single-
gender
schools
 or co-ordinated
schools
.
However
, some people have concerns regarding same-sex
schools
. In my opinion, single-sex
schools
 are more
study oriented
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 and
children
 can learn more.
Submitted by  Niamh Gal on

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