The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the life pattern of honeybees. It depicts how these
type
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types
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of bees grow from merely an
egg
to
a
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fully-functional honeybees.
Overall
, honeybees’ lifecycle is consisting of six stages. It
take
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34-36
days
for them to become
an
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adult
bee
. Their life begins with laying an
egg
or two and ends up meeting another
adult
to help them lay an
egg
again.
Therefore
, the cycle continues.
To begin
with, female honeybees lay an
egg
or two every three
days
. The
adult
bee
may incubate the
egg
until it hatches after a week or up to 10
days
. Five
days
later, their offspring will have its first encounter with the world by going out of its shell. It will
then
grow twice as much as its size from its newborn state and after nine
days
, it will grow nine times more. By
this
stage, they are now called the “nymph moults”
Second
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to the
last
stage is when the young
adult
bee
merges with another
bee
with
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the age as it is. For them to become mature and an official
full grown
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adult
honey
bee
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, it will take them
for
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four
days
to reach that state and so, the cycle repeats.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words egg, days, adult, bee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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