Many people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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how much happy you are.
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believed that there is
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strong
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well being and financial state.
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disagree and outline other factors.In
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I will examine both
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and provide my opinion
at the end
. Start with the first view, with high demands of
money
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critical
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of life like health, education and so far would
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sense why people connect their happiness directly to
money
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insurance
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increased
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more than 25%
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which puts
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in
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to work hard so they can provide a good quality of service to their families.
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achieve
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their
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happiness
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, many personal
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is connected to
money
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why they connected to their happiness. Turning to
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side, There are many factors
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influance
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influence
of person even if their financial state
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enough. One of the common factors is
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of personality and
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way that think.
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through
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time
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they see it as
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a challange
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challenge
and
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to learn
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while
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believed that time
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never pass. How you think positively or
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negatively
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the
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happiness.
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agreed with it. In conclusion, even
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money
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critical
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part of our daily life but
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we have
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imoprtant
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important
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way we see things and
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analysis
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situation
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solution
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