Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The number of unhealthy
people
who choose to use another treatment and medication
instead
of visiting a specialist
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is increasing. Personally, I think
this
has a negative impact on their lives and
also
on society
due to
the following reasons. But first I want to mention some factors that may cause them to act
this
way.
Firstly
, it is very expensive to visit a doctor and
then
purchase the medication.
Additionally
, you often have to wait for hours in the waiting room so it is
also
time-consuming. It is difficult for some
people
to go to the hospitals because they have to spend a lot of money and time.
Secondly
, doctors are humans so they make mistakes sometimes and they have
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, in
this
case,
people
are afraid to go to the doctors because they do not trust them anymore.
For example
, there is a family which has lost their mother recently
due to
a doctor's mistake. I do not think that they will trust the healthcare community easily after that.
Lastly
, medication and medical treatment are usually painful and insufferable, take a person who is afraid of needles as an example, she will not visit a doctor if she catches a cold.
However
, it is undoubtedly true to say that humans are not aware of their bodies
as well as
diagnosticians.
Moreover
, they can not get help from the internet because it is not reliable and it is wrong most of the time. If we rely on the information that we get from the internet,
this
can actually lead to a worse situation and cause more health problems, because of a lack of knowledge about medicine and the human body's mechanism. In conclusion, I believe that there should be an improvement in
this
system, in order to prevent
people
from risking their lives and making wrong decisions. We should be able to use low-price healthcare and trust the experts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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