In some countries, parents want their children to focus on their studies only. Because of this, many young people do not get their first job until after college. In other countries, many children get their first part-time job while still in high school. Which approach do you think is better? Why?

It is commonly believed that families support their kids to study only,
thus
most of those children do not get their first
job
until they get graduated from university.
On the other hand
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countries
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many teenagers get to work during high school. I believe having
job
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earlier would give make children
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be
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responsible
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in society,
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benefiting
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and
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family in
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and long term. Part-time jobs will increase the weight of choices students make in their life path. A perfect example in our lifetime is Elon Musk, he was
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even before graduating from
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. Experience in
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business
and
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market makes students better pickers in university education and
afterward
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.
Moreover
, these years of
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undergraduate
will be less
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on
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shoulders. Some may argue that focusing on studies and investing more time in it would make kids more successful during their educational pathway.
However
, I completely disagree with that, because I believe longer
eperience
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experience
is more salient than high marks in the eye of employers.
For instance
, recently many of the
gient
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technology companies removed
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certifecate
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certificate
from
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requirnments
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requirements
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more years of experience in the sector. In conclusion, each parent wants to see his child in the best
postion
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position
possible in the future. By letting kids faster into
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market and getting more experience, today`s children will be
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tomorrow`s responsible men and women. Without undermining academic
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importance, more and more
cooporations
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corporations
cooperations
nowadays only focus on the employee`s years in
job
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market.
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