Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In many countries, the
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believe that growth in economics should be the main important target to achieve,
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others consider that other aspects should
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improve in
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same way to develop the
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. In my opinion, developing every aspect of a nation leads to
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economical growth automatically. In many countries, the
economy
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plays a vital part in terms of the development of
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country
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.
In other words
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,
governments
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execute various plans and projects in order to stabilise their financial state, because of the competition that they have between nations.
However
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, some
governments
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fail to survive
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game of power. For an instance,
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Lankan government recently took a risk of paying all debts expecting
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growth in the
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but ended up resulting
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economical crisis.
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, every other aspect of the
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was dragged down into
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chaos, because they were concerned about the economics rather than the possibilities of other areas which can indirectly support
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the
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, the development of a
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is based not only on the
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but
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on many factors
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as agriculture, education, tourism, health etc. These are the facts that directly make
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affect
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on
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the
economy
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of a nation. For
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example, a nation with a great level of agriculture can sustain
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people and
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to bring more money into the
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by exporting the excess.
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, an educationally enriched
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is able to produce a large number of professionals who are capable of strengthening the financial aspect. If the government can develop the education system,
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people will not look for foreign educational options,
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result
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a large amount of money will be saved within the
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.
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, having facilities to improve tourism, could
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lead to
build
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building
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the
economy
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in a significant manner, as it
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introduces
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many job vacancies to the people.
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an
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instance, Sri Lanka has
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great tourist attractive locations which can expand the money flow into the
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To conclude
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, nations should not have goals to focus only on economics, and I believe the
governments
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should make
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progress
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areas
such
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as agriculture, education,
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and tourism
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too. If they manage to progress on these aspects,
consequently
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the
finance
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financial
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state will increase tremendously.
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  • technological innovation
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