Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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people
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health
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sports
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facilities
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, others believe it will give Linking Words
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health
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facilities
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people
, I believe it will be better to educate Use synonyms
people
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for
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to
maintain
their Change the verb form
maintaining
health
that Use synonyms
further
will be discussed in the following essay.
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people
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use
public Use synonyms
sports
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facilities
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that
will Correct pronoun usage
which
spent
more money. A Change the verb form
spend
government
has an obligation to keep public Use synonyms
health
by constructing Use synonyms
sports
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center
. Fix the agreement mistake
centers
People
could Use synonyms
use
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this
facilitation together without considering Linking Words
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paying
equipment
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the equipment
use
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, they could Linking Words
jogging
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jog
be jogging
in
the jogging track or Change preposition
on
dancing
in a large group every weekend. Change the verb form
dance
be dancing
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, the Linking Words
government
help Use synonyms
people
to save their money and gain Use synonyms
their
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apply
healthy
.
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health
In contrast
, I think the Linking Words
Government
should prioritize Use synonyms
to educate
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educating
people
before Use synonyms
build
public Wrong verb form
building
sport
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sports
facilities
regarding Use synonyms
to
become Remove the preposition
apply
burden
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a burden
in
maintaining Change preposition
of
sports
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facilities
. I believe not all Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
use
the Use synonyms
facilities
and Use synonyms
also
the Linking Words
Government
have to Use synonyms
spent
more budget on maintenance. Change the verb
spend
For example
, month after month there will be a lot of equipment that damaging by irresponsible Linking Words
people
who Use synonyms
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use
it not in the right way and in some cases they Add a missing verb
do use
not
try to repair the equipment. The Change the verb form
do not
did not
government
should take Use synonyms
another measurements
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another measurement
other measurements
such
as Linking Words
educate
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educating
people
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how
to improve their Change preposition
on how
health
without Use synonyms
build
public Change the verb form
building
sports
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facilities
.
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To sum up
, some Linking Words
people
could spend less money when they Use synonyms
use
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sports
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center
.Fix the agreement mistake
centers
However
, I believe that Linking Words
by
educating them Change preposition
apply
how
to gain their Change preposition
on how
health
without using public Use synonyms
sports
Use synonyms
facilities
, it is more beneficial than Use synonyms
build
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building
sports
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facilities
.Use synonyms
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