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Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Modification plays quite an essential role in society in
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 it is believed by some individuals that beauty should be considered most important in the case of the design of
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but
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 others think that aspects of the structure are more arduous.
This
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 with my perspective
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 subsequent paragraphs. To inaugurate with the view of
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 who
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 towns should be attractive only. In some
cities
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, the population is very less
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 the maintenance of the
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. Meanwhile,
people
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 always want to live in attractive places.
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 property rates are good in these types of places yet
people
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 prefer to buy beautiful houses where they
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find
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 satisfaction. To exemplify it, their famous
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 named Delhi in India
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 only 30% of
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 prefer to have their own house
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 70% of
people
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 live only for work and do not like to buy houses because of pollution and fewer choices in building structures.
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 side, some
people
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 want to have more facilities in
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 because everything is necessary for every town
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such
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, such
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 as hospitals, schools, playgrounds, grocery stores, food courts, entertainment sources
etcetera
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, etcetera
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.
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, it develops the demand of every
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 in society and makes it convenient for
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 to have access to everything at any time.
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, some
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 have to rush from one
city
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 to another if they have a medical emergency during the night
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 is a big issue.
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it is clear that
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 every
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 should be built in
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 a way that
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is everything
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everything is
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 available. In a nutshell, some
people
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 like the beauty of
cities
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 and others prefer functions. I personally believe that both are important in a
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city
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city,
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 as beauty would have no benefits without specialities
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people
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also
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 consider looks in
this
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 era.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Use a clear start, one paragraph for each side, and a short ending with your view.
development
Give a clear reason for each idea and add a small example to show it. Keep ideas simple.
grammar
Keep language simple and check long or odd sentences. Fix basic grammar.
content
You show both sides of the topic.
structure
You end with your own view.
coherence
You use linking words to move from idea to idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban planning
  • Sustainable development
  • Psychological well-being
  • Economic growth
  • Tourism industry
  • Architectural marvels
  • Public spaces
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial hubs
  • Green spaces
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