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some people think that people can be encouraged to take up sport through sporting events such as Olympics. However, others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 have been encouraged to take up sporting events
such
 as OlympicsOlympics.
whereas
 some think that it is better to encourage adults to
exercise
. we will be discussing them below.
To begin
 with, For the
Olympics
, the young
people
 face lots of challenges in it as they have to sacrifice most of their time in practising the same sport giving less priority towards their studies & career and mastering the sport skill.
Furthermore
, encouraging folks to
also
 be
Olympics
 would be a hectic task where they have to maintain themselves physically, and mentally fit and they have lots of completion in the
Olympics
 as
people
 from different countries take part.
This
 is why encouraging
people
 to take
exercise
 would be a better option, rather than, encouraging them for the
Olympics
. On another side,
Exercise
 would be the better option for youngsters and adults.
This
 is because
,
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 by doing
exercise
 they can maintain their weight and fitness.
Moreover
, sports
requires
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 the support of someone to play with them
whereas
, in , the gym they can do the
exercise
 themselves by having a good trainer explain the correct way of doing an
exercise
. By doing
exercise
 they can make time for studies and careers simultaneously. In my opinion,
i
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 feel that
exercise
 would be a better option for youngsters and adults compared to encouraging folk to be a part of the
Olympics
. because they do not have to sacrifice their whole time insisting
in
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 the same sport and have the freedom to choose whichever they want.
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