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public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#transport #government #people
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Public transport is considered a crucial part of life for citizens.
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, Many folks believe that it will be helpful if the government starts financing common transportation to utilize it for free
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 it gives multiple benefits which in I strongly agree with it.
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, if authorities conduct
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 beneficial idea , people will be attracted to use either the bus or metro for their movement,
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 there is no doubt that authorities
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 need to create a new scheme of movements for the mobility of transportation . because Crowded cities always have some issues connected with jammed roads and air pollution, and sequentially folks will start to waste their time
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 . As a ,result there will be a big boost in flexibility on the roads
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 it will give a considerable opportunity to reduce the number of cars at the same time. ,
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 plan
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 provides for the low-class population
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 of high expensive prices for travel in some countries, citizens can not afford travel
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 free one probably would be an outstanding measure for them to save money for medicine or food which is
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 more vital.
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, the government ought to finance public transport for their population and as far as I am concerned, if state power does not charge extra to low-income families, it is definitely a fantastic measure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • sustainability
  • commuters
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • accommodate
  • equitable access
  • public transportation system
  • allocating resources
  • financial burden
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