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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In the present world, society has become more inclined towards reading on the
internet
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 as compared to the past when most folks read books and magazines in the physical format. It is a difficult decision for the governments to take whether to establish free
libraries
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 in each town or not. I will discuss both sides of the argument and give my opinion on the same.
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, the previous generations still prefer to read actual books and articles as they are less accustomed to the
internet
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.
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, there is a huge number of reading material
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 not yet available on the
internet
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. To read
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 material one has to go to public
libraries
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, public
libraries
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 hold a lot of dated newspapers and historic articles that are great for researchers.
On the other hand
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, the
internet
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 is available at the fingertips of consumers. Younger folks prefer the
internet
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 for reading as it is time-saving and is
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 a less headache to search for any material the readers are looking for. A library might not have what a reader is looking for, so in that case, commuting to a library, spending hours looking for the reading material and coming home empty-handed is very depressing.
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, I think the government should not establish free
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 in each town because society as a whole now prefers a laid-back approach to almost anything. If something can be achieved sitting at home, it's highly unlikely that someone would disturb their routine and travel to get it.
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