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“Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion”

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The two pie charts illustrate residential
water
 use in 1988 and 2008.
Overall
, the highest consumption of
water
 in 1988 was for washing,
while
 in 2008 it was for the bathroom and kitchen. In comparison with other
using
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uses
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 the least consumption in 1988 was for the kitchen,
although
 in 2008 it was for a garden. As can be seen from the charts,
water
 for washing was used the most at 25% in 1988,
whereas
 in 2008 using it for washing decreased by 22%,which was used in the bathroom was 22%,
however
,it increased to 28% in 2008.
Water
 for trees, flowers and plants
also
 was significant in 1988 at 20%,
however
, it dramatically fell down to 7% Meanwhile, the consumption of toilet one was more and reached 18% in 1988, but after 20 years it shrank to 4%. In the kitchen, its usage changed significantly.After 20 years,
firstly
 it was 15%, and over time became 29 %
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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