Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members how to be good members of society. Others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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have a crucial role in learn their
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how they can be the perfect citizen
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their society.
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,another group think,
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are more important to teach them to be a good person for their society.in
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I will discuss both views with some examples and I will give my perspective. It is well-established fact that parents are the best guide for their
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after their
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's birth has received enormous duties.First of all,
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live the earlier ages of their life with their
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and spend more time with them.They
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, learn and try to imitate their
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's behaviours.
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who are brought up in disrupted family they can not grow mentally and they may be more aggressive than other
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who grow up in friendly families.
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a parent
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can learn them how they can be sociable and cooperative
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through visiting their families and friend
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learn them how they can respect other
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On the other hand
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duties in
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issue should not be taken lightly.In school,
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enormous chance to learn interpersonal social skills to interact with a wide variety of
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through the time that they spend in school with their classmates and their teachers.The teacher
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a huge obligation to handle
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important issues.
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,as we know
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is the first place for
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enter after their childhood.It means
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and institutions are a simulation of society.School managers and instructors have to provide them
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their future life in the community with some beneficial activities.Some
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encourage
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to participate in social activities or campaigns.For ,instance they persuade
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to make some gadgets or instruments in the group to promote their teamwork skills and ability to struggle with problematic situations.
To sum up
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,In my view,with the cooperation of parents and
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we could gain
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desired result.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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