It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishments' is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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for their lives,families and their society.First of all,they should understand to avoid doing something wrong or harmful.

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at an early age cannot choose between the best and the worst in their life.

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should not be taken lightly.some oral or corporal punishments can

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prefer to smash their

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several days or weeks. In order to help the

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various kinds of dolls or recreational

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can easily deprive them to play with their

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or cut their pocket money

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if they have not done their

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can give them

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if they help their parent

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household chores or when they behave politely with their grandparents.

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