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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 snd 2008.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 snd 2008.
The given information in the pie charts compares four countries in terms of the production of
electricity
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source
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 in three different categories over a period of five years between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most amount of fossil fuel is used by India and Vietnam to generate
electricity
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while
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Sweden
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 and Morocco are consumed hydropower to produce
electricity
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. As can be seen, fossil fuel was the primary
source
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 of
electricity
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 in India, at about 82%,
in
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contrast
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this
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 number was the least common
source
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 in
Sweden
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 and Morocco, which accounted for only 4% and 5 %, respectively. During the period of 5 years, the amount of hydropower used by Morocco was about 95%
on the other hand
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 the figures for
Sweden
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 and Vietnam
was
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 lower at about 52% and 44%, respectively. In terms of nuclear power,
Sweden
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 was very keen to make
electricity
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 from
this
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source
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,
although
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 nuclear power accounted for the lowest proportion in India over the same period of time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, source, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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