Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime.

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activities tend to rise all around the world, mostly among the juvenile. There are three main causes and
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number of solutions can be possible to
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. Perhaps the major
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of parental guidance,
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makes children feel
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to
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have become independent and take
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the most important decisions of their
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in their own way. When parents don’t pay enough attention to their children’s social and educational behaviour, teenagers can’t differentiate what is right or wrong
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their choice.
An another
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pressure
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teens
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environment. Some teenagers want to be known or accepted by other children or their social group,
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they force others to use alcohol, drive without license, burgle, teen gang and other criminal activities.
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, there are problems with poor education. Turning to possible solutions, some family members should set clear guidelines and rules,
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follow their moral and behavioural
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which is possible or impossible.
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life
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by the way solve
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problems together,
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each other or just
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to
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children’s
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their future
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. A second remedy is
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or social workers could advise teens
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criminal or anti-social activities and discuss
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punishment
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it. If teens are taught
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crime and its consequences, they could be more responsible for their
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To sum up
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teenagers to avoid putting themselves
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