People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Recent
years,many family Change preposition
In recent
Use synonyms
structure
has changed Change to a plural noun
structures
into
Change preposition
to
Add an article
the
a
also
have Linking Words
a
Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
change
.Replace the word
changed
In
my Change preposition
From
perspective
I don’t think these changes are positive since Add a comma
,perspective
it
will affect Correct pronoun usage
they
the
Kiel’s growth .
To commence with,role division is the factor that Correct article usage
apply
cause
the family Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
structure
Use synonyms
changed
,it Change the verb form
to change
Use synonyms
change
the traditional view.In 1978,China publish the Reform and opening,Change the verb form
changes
many
people who live in outdated villages more to the city to Correct word choice
and many
work
with their Use synonyms
kids
. Use synonyms
Thus
the family Linking Words
structure
has turned the traditional extended family into a nuclear family
Until nowadays ,the family Use synonyms
structure
has changed a lot, Use synonyms
women
Use synonyms
is
not only limited Change the verb form
are
to
home for Change preposition
at
the
household management or caring Correct article usage
apply
the
Change preposition
for the
kids
but Use synonyms
also
working at the office.Linking Words
For instance
,financial,tourism or service industry,Linking Words
women
get the job opportunity and Use synonyms
paid
Add a missing verb
are paid
same
as men . Correct article usage
the same
Therefore
,there are many career Linking Words
women
in society , some of them still working until Use synonyms
30years
old,they just focus on Correct your spelling
30 years
work
and Use synonyms
lacking
time to date with others. Even some of them said they won’t get Wrong verb form
lack
marry
or give Wrong verb form
married
a
Correct article usage
apply
brith
to a child.
On the other Correct your spelling
birth
hands
. Fix the agreement mistake
hand
Although
the nuclear family Linking Words
having
Wrong verb form
has
the
Correct article usage
apply
kids
,they still need to Use synonyms
working
and Change the verb
work
lacking
time to Wrong verb form
lack
care
Use synonyms
their
Change preposition
for their
child
. The dual-income family have to Fix the agreement mistake
children
work
out all day until Use synonyms
night
. Add an article
the night
However
,the Linking Words
children
are neglected to Use synonyms
care
. Use synonyms
Therefore
,the Linking Words
parents
chose Use synonyms
hiring
Change the verb form
to hire
the
domestic helpers for caring Correct article usage
apply
the
Change preposition
for the
kids
. Not only taking them to school but Use synonyms
also
cooking lunch or dinner for them, Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
cause
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
a
alienation between Remove the article
apply
kids
and Use synonyms
parents
.
I don’t think these changes are positive. Use synonyms
Firstly
, the family relationship will become Linking Words
alienate
,Wrong verb form
alienated
currently
some families Add a comma
,currently
adult
always Fix the agreement mistake
adults
work
all day and lack time to accompany Use synonyms
with
their Change preposition
apply
children
. Since Use synonyms
children
still being Use synonyms
the
growing phase , the Change the article
a
growing
is related Replace the word
growth
with
their Change preposition
to
parents
. If Use synonyms
parents
lack Use synonyms
care
Use synonyms
with
their Change preposition
for
children
, they may go astray or against the Use synonyms
parents
, Use synonyms
it
will cause a Correct pronoun usage
which
deeply
would Change the word
deep
on
their mental health and impact their future.
Change preposition
to
Secondly
,the elderly lack Linking Words
Use synonyms
care
Change preposition
of care
also
is the problem that the family Linking Words
structure
Use synonyms
change
. The traditional social convention is Use synonyms
women
have to Use synonyms
care
Use synonyms
the
elderly at home. Change preposition
for the
However
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
development Change noun form
society's
break
the stereotype, the set Discrimination Act prevent Change the verb form
breaks
the
Correct article usage
apply
women
are same Use synonyms
with
Change preposition
as
the
men . Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, most families with Linking Words
are go
out Change the verb form
go
for
Change preposition
to
work
,nobody cares Use synonyms
the
elderly,some may send the elderly to Change preposition
for the
Elderly’s
Change noun form
Elderly
home
. Fix the agreement mistake
homes
Nerrethless
, many of them Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
unwilling
to go there as it Add a missing verb
are unwilling
just
like Add a missing verb
is just
a
elderly’s prison ‘ they can’t get freedom , only can Change the article
an
watching
TV Wrong verb form
watch
,
or Remove the comma
apply
newspaper
. Correct article usage
the newspaper
The life
is boring and some may suicide.
Correct article usage
Life
To conclude
, there are different challenges Linking Words
about
the family Change preposition
to
structure
Use synonyms
change
. Use synonyms
Although
it has Linking Words
upside
and Fix the agreement mistake
upsides
downside
, I still think family Fix the agreement mistake
downsides
structure
is Use synonyms
negative
bigger than positive.Correct quantifier usage
more negative
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