The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
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The diagram depicts the number of grown-ups who participated in the four mentioned activities in the countryside and metropolitan regions between 1900 and 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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reading was the most popular activity in both urban and rural areas
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animated play and
photography
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were shown in reverse. To commence with, in 1990, the percentage of adults who took part in reading activities in urban and rural areas started at about 61 & 71 sequentially.
On the other hand
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, animated play and
photography
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activities had the least participants. In the animated play, the percentage in each countryside and cities were merely at about 10 & 18 chronologically
while
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photography
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was at about 7 in urban area which is only a half
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per cent
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from the bucolic area. Eventually, playing was in second place by no more than 26
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per cent
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in each category.
In contrast
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, in 2010, some trends occurred in every activity in which reading, and
photography
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underwent an upward
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animated play and playing faced declined numbers and constant movement in every region. In reading, the percentage increased in each region to about 3
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photography
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rose to about 10. On the flip side, animated play in urban remained
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in the rural area, it declined slightly to 14.
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, playing participants in cities showed the same trend with urban animated numbers
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the countryside downward to 14.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words photography with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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