The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
The diagram depicts the number of grown-ups who participated in the four mentioned activities in the countryside and metropolitan regions between 1900 and 2010.
Overall
, it is clear that
reading was the most popular activity in both urban and rural areas while
animated play and photography
were shown in reverse.
To commence with, in 1990, the percentage of adults who took part in reading activities in urban and rural areas started at about 61 & 71 sequentially. On the other hand
, animated play and photography
activities had the least participants. In the animated play, the percentage in each countryside and cities were merely at about 10 & 18 chronologically while
photography
was at about 7 in urban area which is only a half percent
from the bucolic area. Eventually, playing was in second place by no more than 26 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in each category.
Change the spelling
per cent
In contrast
, in 2010, some trends occurred in every activity in which reading, and photography
underwent an upward while
animated play and playing faced declined numbers and constant movement in every region. In reading, the percentage increased in each region to about 3 while
photography
rose to about 10. On the flip side, animated play in urban remained while
in the rural area, it declined slightly to 14. Lastly
, playing participants in cities showed the same trend with urban animated numbers while
the countryside downward to 14.Submitted by lumbantobingevaa on
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