Shopping online is becoming much popular in todays world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Due to
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rapid
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the rapid
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growth of technology. Business organizations Have switched over from the traditional
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of selling to
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the electronic
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method
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due to
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its popularity among
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.In
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essay, I will outline
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the cons
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and pros of online shopping. Start with advantages, a significant number of people prefer online shopping over
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the traditional
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way of shopping
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three main reasons.
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the convenience of online shopping in light
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of
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fact
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the fact
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that most
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the application
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application
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applications
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are friendly
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and efficient in
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terms
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of time.
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, Jahze is
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an online
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application for food it
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order
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an order
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in 15 minutes.
Secondly
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, people have
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to
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compared
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product
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products
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in
term
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terms
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of price and quality
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traditional
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the traditional
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method
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which
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hard to visit all stores
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physically
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and decide.
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, the availability of
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would encourage people to purchase. Turning to the disadvantages, one of the
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risk
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in
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online shopping is
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because the payment
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sometimes
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is sometimes
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not secured and Customers have to be careful in revealing their personal information.
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Additionally
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some of the e-tailers are unreliable.
Moreover
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, the lack of experience in online
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method
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methods
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.
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, once
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application
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when I received
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found out that the quality
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as shown in
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and
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even
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size not as I request.
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, the benefits of online
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action should be promoted to improve the issue mention to gain the benefit of technology. In conclusion, the convenience, wide range of option in term of price and different part related to the product is
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reason for
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popularity
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the
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fraud and lack of experience would
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to be
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one issue when talking about online shopping.
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