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Shopping online is becoming much popular in todays world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

#todays #world #trend
Due to
rapid
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 growth of technology. Business organizations Have switched over from the traditional
method
 of selling to
electronic
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the electronic
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method
due to
 its popularity among
customer
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customers
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.In
this
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cons
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the cons
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 and pros of online shopping. Start with advantages, a significant number of people prefer online shopping over
traditional
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the traditional
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 way of shopping
due to
 three main reasons.
First,
the convenience of online shopping in light
if
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fact
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the fact
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 that most
of
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the application
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application
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applications
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 are friendly
use
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 and efficient in
term
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terms
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 of time.
For example
, Jahze is
online
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an online
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 application for food it
deliver
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order
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an order
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 in 15 minutes.
Secondly
, people have
chance
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 to
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the compared
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compared
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product
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products
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 in
term
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terms
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 of price and quality
unlike
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traditional
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the traditional
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method
 which
be
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is
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 hard to visit all stores
phyiscaly
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physically
physical
 and decide.
Finally
, the availability of
discount
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 would encourage people to purchase. Turning to the disadvantages, one of the
highly
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aspect
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in
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of
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 online shopping is
Frauds
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 because the payment
method
sometimes
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is sometimes
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 not secured and Customers have to be careful in revealing their personal information.
Additionally
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 some of the e-tailers are unreliable.
Moreover
, the lack of experience in online
method
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methods
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.
For instance
, once
time
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a time
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 I order drees from
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the famous
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 application
,
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 when I received
I
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them I
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found out that the quality
not
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 as shown in
pictures
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the pictures
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 and
more
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even
that
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 size not as I request.
Although
, the benefits of online
but
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action should be promoted to improve the issue mention to gain the benefit of technology. In conclusion, the convenience, wide range of option in term of price and different part related to the product is
main
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 reason for
that
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 popularity
while
the
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fraud and lack of experience would
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 to be
of
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one issue when talking about online shopping.
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