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death penality is best way to control and reduce serious crime to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#death #penality #control #crime
Over the years the use of
death
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penalty
 in administering punishment for serious
crime
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crimes
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 has been considered the most appropriate method
in
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 curbing and decreasing the rate of these crimes. With progress in the development of humans, some
school
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schools
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 of thought question if it is really the best option for mitigating serious
crime
. I agree with
this
 group as
i
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 do not think that
death
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the death
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penalty
 is the perfect method for controlling and reducing serious
crime
.
Firstly
,
death
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penalty
 offers no room for rehabilitation
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 the person who has been found guilty
for
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of
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 a serious
crime
. Convicts of these crimes may be able to turn on new leaves after proper training and help
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 been offered to them. With adequate
assistance
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 these
group
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 of people may become useful to the government by using their abilities for a better cause.
Also
 in the case of wrong accusations and wrong verdicts,
a
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death
penalty
 would have caused an unwarranted loss of life which is irreversible as
have
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 been documented in times past. But if other types of punishment are used, it may prevent
this
 undesirable effect.
To conclude
,
i
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I
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 am of the opinion that the use of
death
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the death
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penalty
 in curbing serious
crime
 is not the best method. Other types of punishment should be considered.
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