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You want to learn a language. There is a teacher near to where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In the letter Say how you came to know about him/her Explain why you want to learn Ask what help they can offer

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Dear Mr Kim Taehyung I am writing to letter request to you. I want to learn a new
language
 from you I heard you are a
Korean
language
 teacher. The
last
 day I went out and I walked the street .
Then
 suddenly I saw Sara and she asked me. A new neighbour moved
our
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 street. His name was Kim Taehyung.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, he is a
korean
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language
 teacher. He
is teach
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 students. So, I
want
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towant
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 learn
a new languages
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a new language
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.
Such
 as
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the korean
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korean
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language
. I am a student
in
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the
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INHA UNIVERSITY.
This
 University
in
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 South Korea. South
korean
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 pupils speak in their mother
language
.
For example
korean
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language
. I am living in South Korea at the moment.
Then
 I must know
Korean
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language
. But I do not know
this
language
. I know Russian, English and Uzbek languages.
That is
 why
,
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 I want to learn a new
language
 from you. I have one question for you "what help you can offer" I hope you
want
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 write
down
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it down
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 soon. Yours faithfully Mina
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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