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In order to imporove the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teachers, but other think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. What your opinion ?

#imporove #quality #education #school #students #criticise #teachers #loss #respect #discipline #classroom
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one of the top
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an
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 every individual to be
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successful
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 in his/ her life. It is often argued that there should be
evaluation
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 and criticism of professors by secondary
school
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 scholars ,
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other
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others
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 have
opinion
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 that it would be
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of
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teachers
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 . In my point of view , there should be
evaluation
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 criteria for
teachers
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 as well just to enhance their teaching strategies and their knowledge . On one hand, there
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number
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 of reasons
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why many people demand
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encouraging
students
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 to
criticise
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 the
lectureres
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lecturers
lectures
.
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 , nowadays money matters more than
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knowledge
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 and skill . People are buying
a degrees
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degrees
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 and
certificate
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certificates
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 rather than
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 them by attending courses and studying in reality .
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 , when those people get jobs they do not have any understanding of concepts .
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 , not all
teachers
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 but most of them are just covering the
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curriculum
 without going into details of any topic . So
students
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 should be able to
criticise
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 them to get all detail about
course
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 .
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 ,
evaluation
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 could results in
induction
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the induction
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 of better teaching strategies in
school
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 staff , ultimately
leads
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 to quality education in
classroom
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the classroom
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 .
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subconcious
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subconscious
 minds of pupils ,
instead
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 of
focusssing
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focussing
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 on theoretical things.
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this criteria
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 is not accepted by
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other
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 half of society
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 reasons. At top of everything ,
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 is not a part of
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 to disobey the
teachers
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 , because
teachers
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 are considered
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a god as they are the only
one
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 to enlighten the future of
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child
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children
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 by providing them with
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 of information .
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 them or by criticising them ,
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would be
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disrespect
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 a teacher
that is
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not
a
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 acceptable matter in society .
Furthermore
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 , it would encourage the youngsters to generate a habit of
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evaluation
evacuation
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criticise
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 others , which could end up in developing
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bad personality traits in them . In my opinion ,
students
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opportunity
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 to ask
open
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question
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questions
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 to
teachers
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 to clarify their doubts regarding
to
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academics . There should be
such
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atmoshphere
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atmosphere
 in
classroom
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the classroom
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 that they could ask anything
to
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professors without any hesitation .
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 , if
this
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 would happen
then
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 there would be no need
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criticise
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 the educators .
However
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, there should be specific
evaluation
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 criteria in each institution to enhance the knowledge of lecturers as well , not from
students
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 but from
school
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authorties
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authorities
.
To conclude
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 , direct criticism is not a solution
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 anything , especially
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the delicate
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 minds of
students
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 should not be encouraged or prepared to
criticise
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 their elders either
teachers
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 or parents , but there should be
timely
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 inspection of
school
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 staff whether they are providing
a suitable information
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suitable information
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 to scholars and is it
a
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 appropriate way to deliver
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