In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Despite the recent global decrease in serious

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in several countries, some

people

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still feel more concerned than they felt before. There are still less serious

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committed,which often remain unpunished.In

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feeling unsafe and will propose solutions to address the issue. One of the main causes

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of feeling fearful is the loss of personal privacy and the loss of control over security.Personal details have become accessible to many companies and some of them are not legitimate. Our personal information is shared for different purposes, for registration to a certain web page, for and buying certain goods.

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feel less protected as their personal data is being virtually shared Another factor contributing to feeling unsafe is that, even though rates of serious

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reduced in recent years, numbers of minor

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as fraud remain the same.

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, many of those

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are still unsolved and criminals remain unpunished, which encourages other criminals to commit a crime. Effects on filling unsafe are significant.

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to the frustration and emotional damage caused by being scammed,

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received financial damages from those

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. To address the problem of some residents of different countries still not feeling protected, there are several solutions that can be implemented.

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, the government can introduce stricter laws for minor

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of fines,

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, jail sentences can be added.

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, technology can be made safer, more control systems can be added in regard to protecting

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's personal information from sharing. In conclusion, despite the number of certain

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declined in recent years, some are still concerned . To address

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safer cyber system must be implemented.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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availability heuristic
media coverage
misinformation
urbanization
community cohesion
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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Fully explain your ideas

in some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

task 1: The illustrations show how chocolate is produced.

The compares shows percentage of water used in different places in Sydney. Australia in 1997 and 2007.

Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantages out weigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.