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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest

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Making changes is
a
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human nature that an individual resist. The dilemmas it would cause
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people
 are fear of
unknown
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 about future events and routines that are hard to break. The most viable solutions are
people
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 should embrace the discomfort of uncertainty and awareness of
change
. Changes in life
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a tremendous effects
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 on
people
's lives. For some
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individual
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this
change
 would cause anxiety
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 the things they are not fully aware
.
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In addition
, it is a threat to
people
 that has
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 tolerance to cope with unpredictable situations.
Moreover
, most
people
 resist
change
due to
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developed over the years.
This
 act is already encrypted in their system and
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 to outgrow.
For instance
, an employee
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 to stay in the same institution despite of unsatisfying job. There are numerous ways to overcome these difficulties.
People
 must face the
unrealibility
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unreliability
 brought by
change
 because nobody knows what the future holds. A person could perform some relaxation
technique
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such
 as breathing to ease the stress.
People
 could
also
 break old habits and get out
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comfort zones. Apart from that, building awareness
such
 as learning
future
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 growth could help overcome fears.
For example
, those employees that seek professional excellence through
trainings
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training
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 in other institutions have a wider range of skills and capabilities in performing their tasks. In conclusion,
change
 is the only permanent in
this
 world and many
people
 withstand
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it. Individuals
that
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encounter
change
 which causes them to have fear in life
such
 as unsureness and hardship in facing new
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. Openness to accept that
change
in
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 inevitable and willingness to learn are the key factors to alleviate
this
 problem.
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