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Some people think that going to a fitness centre regularly is unnecessary. Instead, they believe that combining occasional exercise (such as going for walks) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some claim that
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regular fitness is not necessary.
Also
, they think they can mix outdoor
activities
,
such
 as walking, to balance with
diet
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their diet
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 to adequately keep their
health
. I definitely disagree
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this
 view, and
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 of professional gym recommendations in detail.
Firstly
, relying on scattered
exercises
 and
occassional
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occasional
activities
as
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 normal walking, no matter how tough it is,
people
 would not improve
health
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their health
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 situation effectively.
For example
, a person could not gain sufficient and professional
exercises
 without a coach's guidance in
gym
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. As a matter of fact, first of all, an increasing number of obesity
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 appearing in the communities of the country.
Likewise
, some other
disaseases
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diseases
,
such
 as high blood pressure, heart attack and diabetes,
are seriously impact
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the
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humanity's
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health
. The World Obesity Federation published,
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, there will be one billion
people
 that are living with obesity as predicted by 2030.
Moreover
, most
people
 like that could not launch or facilitate their physical
activities
due to
 their laziness.
Also
, they would not gain better effects without
professional
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 tutor's advice.
Thus
, occasional
activities
 are not adequate
to
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human's
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health
.
Addtionally
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Additionally
,
people
 should have noticed their diet and control it well in spite of a few or more
exercises
 of losing weight as long as they would be healthy. In conclusion, only short-term
exercises
 are not enough to maintain
people
's
health
. All need to be strong and healthy should introduce advanced gym or fitness facilities, with
its
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professional tutors. If so,
adding
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 restricted food,
the
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humanity would
sucessfully
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successfully
 retain their
health
 in the long run eventually.
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