The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
There are two charts that demonstrate the
houshold
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household
energy
use
and the greenhouse
gas
emissions in Australia at the same time which energy
use
chart leads to greenhouse
gas
.
Generally, there are five categories for household energy
consumption that there are heating and cooling, waterheating
, refrigeration, lighting and other appliances. among them the most consumption of Correct your spelling
water heating
energy
use
is in first
category (heating and cooling). Add an article
the first
However
, this
category produce
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produces
less
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fewer
greenhouse
gases.
About 74% of energy
uses include heating and cooling and water heating that water heating produce
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produces
one third
of Add a hyphen
one-third
gas
emissions. Although
, this
ratio for cooling and heating is about under 20%.
For two other categories that use
energy
, refrigeration and lighting, they use
less than 10% for each of them. But, they produce double greenhouse
gases 14% and 8% respectively. Moreover
, this
ratio is included for other applances
that 15% Correct your spelling
appliances
people
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of people
use
it but 28% produce greenhouse
gas
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