The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
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The line graph illustrates the various areas in the country of Europe that
was
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visited by foreign tourists
in
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from
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year
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the year
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1897 until 2007. They visited the lakes,
mountain
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mountains
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and coast.
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, there are
top
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three tourist destinations in Europe. The coast had the highest view
of
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around 80
thousand
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tourist
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tourists
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in 2007
while
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the
the
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mountain had only almost 40
thousand
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in the same
year
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. In 1987, the coast had a starting number of visitors
in
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of
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about 40
thousand
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. A gradual decline of roughly 35% was noted in the
year
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1992. As it reach the
year
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of
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apply
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2007, it rose to twice as much as 80
thousand
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. Meanwhile, for the
mountains
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it started off with 20
thousand
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and a consistent minimal increase to almost 40
thousand
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by the end of 2007. For the lakes, it quadruples from ten to 40
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subsequently
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betwenn
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between
1987 and 1997. Reaching
it’s
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peak in 2002 with almost 80
thousand
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, it is
also
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noted a rapid decrease to roughly 50
thousand
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in 2007.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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