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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It is undeniable that many aspects have a massive impact on our
health
 conditions.
However
 , I am convinced that the influence post a threat to our
life
. The average standard of human
health
 conditions is definitely going to decline. In the following essay , I'll outline my thoughts and reasons. With advanced technology,
such
 as tablets or smartphones , more and more devices are being invented. Unsurprisingly, businessmen create them to appeal to
people
 and stimulate consumption .
However
 , consumers are spending unnecessary time on these services , which will pose a threat to their
life
 because of addiction .
For example
, sleeping disorders or neglecting work .
On the other hand
 , not only technology is improved, but
also
 medical treatment . Nowadays , scientists do lots of experiments in order to extend
people
's
life
 or cure sickness. When
people
 get sick , taking medication is the top policy . Yet , we often ignore the potential risk factor that these medicines are kept in our bodies, the more we take , the more they are accumulated . In the long term , our organs are overwhelmed with these chemical products, which will ultimately jeopardize our
health
 . For those who disagree that future
health
 condition is going to downgrade , the advocates maintain the opinion , medicine cures everything .
Nevertheless
 , the treatment
attributed
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 to more potential diseases, which we shouldn't overdose them .
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 of conclusion , it seems that there are different opinions on
this
 contentious issue.
Nonetheless
, the future
life
 standard might be upgraded , but the possibility of failure can't be disregarded. Hopefully,
people
's
health
 quality rate can increase, or even maintain .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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