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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The agreement of homosexuals goes on controversial. Many
people
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 think
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 trend has effects on
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society
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 others trust that it is seen as a human right for
people
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 to follow their heart to choose the type of
marriage
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. I believe that it is right for everyone to choose what they love and I will express my opinions in
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 essay. In my point of view, I think it is important for everyone to be able to choose the person they love.
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, we have many different cultures and religions between countries and races, but we have the same types of gender which are male, female and unisex. In the past, unisex was diagnosed as a disease and they cannot be able to pregnant because of the organ damage.
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,
homosexual
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 is a trend for seeing the same gender partner, it was diagnosed as a psychological disease decades ago;
nowadys
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nowadays
, because
of
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the medication has improved and the
reseachers
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researchers
 found that it was the original
desires
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from
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the
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human beings. At
first,
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it was hard for
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 genders couples to get married illegally;
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, more and more countries in Europe recognise homosexual
marriage
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, and most European residents support it there are many activities for
people
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 to participate
to
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 understand what
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homosexual
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 is.
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, many countries all over the world make the same gender
marriage
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 legal. In conclusion, I believe that committing
homosexual
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 as legal
marriage
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 is a big step for our society, all cultures develop from many fights and so do the issues of
marriage
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. It is the respect of the
people
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 who love the same genders.
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