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Some people believe that old buildings should be protected by law. Others, however, think that they should be replaced by new buildings. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In present-day society, many cities face the issue of whether old
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 should be replaced by new
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 or not. As I see it, old
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 should be maintained. Historic
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 certainly have much value in various ways. In the first place, a large number of historic
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 represent specific historical figures or events. To be more exact, if
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 were razed, there would be no precise representation of the corresponding figures and events anymore.
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, some historic dwellings embody the unique lifestyle of ethnic groups. Without a doubt, it could be an ethnological disaster if these
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 were demolished because of current urban needs.
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 but not least, many historic
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 have outstanding aesthetic value. That means any replication can never show
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ancient craftsmanship accurately. Surely,
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 the rapid increase
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 urban population, some historic
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 should be knocked down in order to make room for high-rise apartment
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. Yet a more sensible solution to
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 problem can be developing urban transport so that people can easily live in nearby suburbs and commute easily every day.
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, though old
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 may have occupied a lot of urban space, their value should not be neglected. In light of the above factors, I firmly believe that historic
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 must be looked after by modern cities.
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