Students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet. While the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational proposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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is acting as a boon for every age group in
this
modern world by boosting their knowledge about any concept . It has been a topic of debate
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few years
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whether
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scholars should be allowed to use the
internet
to access their educational
content
or should be banned to use the same
due to
its few detrimental effects .
Although
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am agreed with the positive side of using
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but
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its drawbacks can not be ignored. To start with the
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internet
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vast information
of
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about
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each and every concept in
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manner .
One
can learn anything from Safari and Google etcetera to enhance their knowledge .
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have
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every question related to any course ,
therefore
it is providing ease to not only students but to elders as well to search
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queries .
Furthermore
,
internet
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the internet
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have
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ample
of
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courses that
one
can pursue from their
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with flexible hours
in
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free of cost . In the contrast , these
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engines have negative aspects as well . On the top , the
content
on these
sites
is not accurate ,
one
can not trust
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the information
providing
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provided
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on the
internet
because
,
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there are ample
of
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sites
for
one
specific thing and each site have its own concept regarding
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particular
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topic .
Consequently
, it can
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the students with unreliable information.
Moreover
,
internet
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is reducing the habit of manual reading from books in
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children
, as they prefer to learn everything by watching
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on
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videos provided by the
Internet
instead
of clarifying the same notion by reading from various books .In
turn
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it is
effecting
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affecting
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the importance of literature in
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generation .To add on , it is promoting
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a sedantary
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sedentary
lifestyle among youngsters , as they prefer to sit in front of screens for
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day which ends up
into
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various health ailments like weak eyesight and obesity and many more diseases.At
last
but not least , there is not only educational
content
on these social media
sites
but sometimes sensitive and inappropriate
content
is
also
there , which can misguide
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delicate minds towards wrong things like drug addiction .
To conclude
,
i
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am agreed with the notion that
use
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the use
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of the
internet
should be
resticted
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restricted
for students but we can not underestimate its benefits , so
instead
of completely
banned
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banning
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the
searching
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engines , we can restrict the access
of
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the
internet
to
childern
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children
upto
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up to
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limited
sites
.
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